Review: Motor City Mage by Cindy Spencer Pape

Title: Motor City Mage
Author: Cindy Spencer Pape,
Publisher: Carina Press
Pub Date: March 12, 2012
Category: ADULT Fantasy Romance

Here’s another great Cindy Spencer Pape fantasy romance from Carina Press. This urban fantasy should satisfy lovers of traditional fantasy as well because the story takes us through portals into totally different worlds populated by some delightfully bizarre creatures.

 Des is a mage and a cop who keeps paranormals in line. The league of Mages he works for has a history of mistrust/predjudice of the other paranormals and though Des has a family who embraces the other races more than most, he has a hard time trusting them. Even so, he has the hots the beautiful werewolf Lana, someone he’s pretty sure he can’t have – not if he wants to keep his job.

She’s sexy, gutsy, flamboyant and no ones pet moggie. He thinks she’s not his type but he can’t stop lusting after her. Lana admires Des, but she can’t be with someone who won’t take her seriously, no matter how much she’d love to rip off his dress shirt.

A nasty new drug turns up in Detroit, Des is sent to investigate, and Lana insists on coming along. But they end up in a cell in a demon dimension. To get home, they must break out of prison and escape through a series of unpredictable alternate realities – together. In true romance fashion, their relationship develops after it starts with hot sex when they can’t deny their mutual attraction. By the time they get home Des is wondering if keeping his job is worth giving up Lana and they still have to bust the drug ring. The end is in keeping with the romance genre and though some might say that it ties up a little too neatly, I like a happy ending.

I give it 5 stars and recommend it for all fantasy romance lovers.

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What kind of quality control do indie books have?

Recently a blog post written by a traditionally published author accused self published books of being not truly published because they didn’t have to pass a set of standards evaluated by people independent of the author. (I haven’t provided a link because I don’t want you to waste your time reading something based on ignorance and designed to increase prejudice. The link is on the Awesome Indies blog though.) The post received over 300 comments. Many of them pointed out the false assumptions of the writer and defended the rising quality in self-published books, while others showed that the old view of self-published books as inferior is alive and well and plenty of people don’t want to give it up despite all evidence to the contrary. However, if you cut away the emotionalism on both sides, he did have a point.

Ouch. Put down those rotten tomatoes and listen before you react. I am not agreeing that self-published books as a matter of course don’t pass the same standards as set by publishing houses. I am saying that it’s important that they do. It’s true that a self published author doesn’t have to pass such standards before being published, but it’s also true that they can easily make sure that they do. It is, of course, up to the author. Some will make sure they have this quality control and some won’t. The Awesome Indies lists those that do, and there are a growing number of them.

I’VE RECENTLY READ SEVERAL BOOKS PUBLISHED BY MAINSTREAM PUBLISHERS THAT WOULDN’T MAKE THE AWESOME INDIES LIST, so what does that say about the supposedly inscrutable standards set by the big publishers?

I consider myself an Indie publisher rather than a self-publisher because  with Catapult Press, I don’t make the final decision on whether a book is publishable or not. But a self-publisher could also do this by finding, or paying someone they trust (the tougher the better – pay me, pay me!) to make that decision for them.

The basic standards to ensure a professional product that I have to pass before publishing are set out on the front page of the Awesome Indies site as follows…

  • the plot is strong and engaging
  • the characters are well developed and their dialogue and interactions with others are believable.
  • the book is not excessively wordy, particularly, no rambling descriptions, dumps of information, unnecessary repetition or irrelevant scenes.
  • changes in the point of view of the writing are clear, specifically no ‘head hopping.’
  • the author knows how to show the story rather than tell it, so that the writing is immediate and engaging.
  • the grammar, spelling and punctuation are correct.

What I don’t have to do is

  • fit a style, or genre, or fashion box made by mainstream publishers that not only says what the public wants, but also ensures that it’s what the public buy by not  providing anything else.
  • find a publisher
    • at exactly the right time, when their book quota in my genre for the coming years isn’t already full.
    • who is as passionate about my work as I am
  • convince a marketing department that my book isn’t too difficult for them to sell.

None of the above points has anything to do with quality. They have to do with timing, the personal taste of a publisher and their perception of what the public wants.

Here is the process I went through with Give Me a Break to make sure that it was of a publishable standard. The assessments of all these people are independant of  their relationship with me.

  1. My business partner assessed the basic idea. We discussed it. He read the second draft and gave feedback on the large things, character, dialogue, plot etc. He’s particularly good on plot.
  2. My daughter (presently doing a communications degree) read it and gave feedback. She’s particularly good on dialogue and character.
  3. I sent the book to beta readers, who gave me the same kind of feedback I’d get from an editor looking at the structural elements. Give me a Break’s beta readers included 3 other published writers whose work I respect, (one of them won an award for literature,) a professional editor, and someone with a degree in creative writing.
  4. I rewrote it until I’d solved the problems my beta readers pointed out.
  5. My partner read it again. At this stage for Give Me a Break, he made me rewrite the middle two chapters three times before he approved it. (Yes, my partner is my husband, but that doesn’t make a scrap of difference. No way is he going to let me put anything out there that isn’t up to his exacting standards. He’s already completely canned one book.)
  6. He approved it and I’m leaving it to sit for a month, then I’ll print it out and look at it again. I’ll fix up anything that jumps out at me, then I’ll send it to an editor for copy and line editing.

So, does my book have to pass professional standards evaluated by people independent of me before it’s published? I think so. Is this is adequate quality control? Read Give Me a Break when it comes our and see what you think.

Terri Giuliano Long,  author of the novel In Leah’s Wake, has written a related feature “Sticks and Stones: The Changing Politics of the Self-Publishing Stigma”  on the IndieReader and Huffington Posts websites. It’s a great article, make sure you read it. There’s a bit of background on the article on the Awesome Indies blog as well.

A few simple pointers that improved my writing enormously.

I don’t claim to be an expert on writing, far from it, but I’ve learned a few things in the course of my writing journey and I like to share what’s made the most difference to the quality of my writing. I wrote about the subtle ways that we tell instead of show once before (here and here) and I’m doing another post on it now because I’ve read quite a few books recently where the writing was poor simply because the author hadn’t known these points. I really hope those authors read this, because in most instances, the structure, characters, plot, pacing and so on was good but the writing made everything seem a little dull.

Renni Browne and Dave King in Self-Editing for Fiction Writers (a must buy for every author) say that awareness of the following when revising “will help your work look like that of a professional rather than an amateur.”

Weed out the “to-be-verbs”: is, am, are, was, were, be, being, and been.

  1. Turn ‘ing’ into ‘eds’ where possible.
  2. Avoid starting sentences with ‘as’ or ‘ing’ words

When I follow those dot points, I write with greater precision and purpose. One of my mentors, Australian editor Selena Hanet Hutchins told me that overuse of “to-be-verbs” weakens the writing and Renni Browne and Dave King say the same about starting sentences with ‘as’ or words ending in ‘ing’. Why? Because it “tends to place some of your action at one remove from your reader, to make the action incidental, unimportant.” For more details on why read Chapter 11 of “Self-editing for fiction writers” on sophistication.

Have a look at the improvements in these sentences from following the above dot points.

 There was too much tension simmering beneath the surface.

became

Too much tension simmered beneath the surface.

And

‘Cut it out!’ Ariel cried, grabbing his hand and pushing it away.

became

‘Cut it out!’ Ariel grabbed his hand and pushed it away.

 Do you see how much more immediate the writing became? When I do a search for ‘was’, I’m looking at the sentences out of context and it makes the clunky writing clear. I often improve sentences even when I leave the ‘was’.

Have you heard these tips before? What has improved your writing?

Review: Unspent time by Graham Parke, buy for 99c & enter to win a Kindle Fire or a Kindle Touch

Book title: Unspent Time
Author: Graham Parke
Publisher: OutskirstPress (pb) Amazon (eb)
Genre: Fantasy

Warning: reading this novel may make you more attractive and elevate your random luck by about 9.332%* (*These statements have not been evaluated by anyone of consequence.) If this catch line for Unspent Time gives you a giggle, you’re in for a treat.

  Unspent Time is a collection of short stories and I loved it for its humour, originality and general craziness. If you have a prejudice against short stories, drop it and read this. It’s highly entertaining and the author’s commentary links the stories into a unified and satisfying whole.

The blurb is a good indicator of the subject matter, so I’ve included it here.

Blurb:

From the award winning author of ‘No Hope for Gomez!’ comes a collection of 20 impossible tales. Permeating the cracks between the past and the present is the realm of Unspent Time. Pockets of ‘should have been’s and ‘might have happened’s. Time that was allotted but never spent. In this realm we find the stories that could have been true.  Such as the story of Kiala, whose aunt and caretaker disappears one day, leaving her as the sole Huntress to battle the giant octopi to feed her village. Or the revealing tale of Goki Feng Ho: the ancient Chinese art of decoding the meaning of car license plates. And the heartbreaking story of the man responsible for choosing the colors of the insides of your shoes. As he toils away in obscurity, his work impacts society in ways we’ll never fully comprehend. And let’s not forget the story behind Unspent Time itself, the metaphysical ramifications of which will leave the scientific community feeling mostly indifferent about it for decades to come…

 Graham’s vibrant characters shine from the first page of each story. His sensitive portrayal hooks our empathy and makes them, and even their sometimes fantastical stories, very real. I love the way fantasy and reality play alongside each other in this collection, and like the best short stories, there’s more to them than just entertaining tales. For example, in the Goki Feng Ho story, a ridiculous system of decoding the meaning of car license plates takes on cultish overtones and makes us wonder at man-kind’s ability to find and defend meaning in all sorts of places.

I give this book 5 stars and add it to the Awesome Indies listing. I haven’t read No Hope for Gomez because it isn’t available on ebook, but if it’s anything like this, then I’d love to.

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Sound bites from Unspent Time:

“I’m looking into my past lives. I’m convinced some of them still owe me money.”

“I’m very polite by nature, even the voices in my head let each other finish their sentences.”

“I didn’t actually want to do it,” Kiala told the boy. “The universe just kind of conspired to force me to make a fool of myself. It does that quite a lot, actually.”

“Sadly, my socks are like snowflakes, no two are exactly alike.”

Here’s what reviewers had to say:

“A veritable page turner of nonstop laughs!” — Reader Views
“An unputdownable read. a Coens Brothers’ film in book form.” — BookReview.com
“Extremely witty and clever writing.” — California Chronicle
“A Party for your Brain!” — Warren Baxter

Bio:

Graham Parke is responsible for a number of technical publications and has recently patented a self-folding map. He has been described as both a humanitarian and a pathological liar. Convincing evidence to support either allegation has yet to be produced.

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The best beta readers are the most critical.

When you ask someone to read your work, I suggest that you take the attitude that their criticisms will help you to make your book better. You should look forward to their criticism and understand that the harsher they seem, the better your book will be when you have fixed the problems. It’s better to have the criticism before it’s published than afterwards when it’s too late to fix it.

This is why the best beta readers are the most critical and I always tell mine to be very critical and not to feel that they will hurt my feelings. Here are my suggestions for the kind of things you can ask them to look at.

  • If you lose interest, please stop reading & I’ll send you a revised edition later. Tell me where I lost you.
  • In general, does the story/plot work? Is there anywhere where it wanders or seems unclear or irrelevant?
  • Is the beginning engaging? Does it make you want to read on? If not, why? Do you have any suggestions for improvement?
  • Were any of the sections too slow? Were you bored? Where? Any idea why you felt this way?
  • Did you like the characters? Why, why not? Were their motivations clear and their actions and dialogue realistic? Were the changes in POV clear?
  • What did you think of the ending?

I had some terrific beta readers read Give me a Break recently, but even after I’d fixed all the problems they had pointed out, my super-critical husband slammed the middle chapters – and I’m really glad he did.

He said he loved the first half and hated the second half (yes, he was that blatant; if you don’t divorce your critical spouse, it helps you develop a thick skin) so we looked at the crucial middle chapters and worked out why. One of my other readers had said that that part was a little fuzzy and needed to be tightened, but even after I thought I’d done that, according to hubby, it just wasn’t working. So we sat down and worked out why.

I discovered that I was skirting around the real guts of what I was trying to say. I hadn’t given the material the depth it needed to work. I’d skimmed the surface and taken away its power. To him, it came out looking pathetic. We decided that I had to write it more real and direct. I did and now it has the power and clarity that it needs. It’s real and it’s believable, and if I’ve had to bare my soul to do it, then that’s what it needed. An artist doesn’t do anything truly meaningful without taking risks and pushing themselves just that little bit further.

So take your criticisms as the cloth that will make your gold shine, not the hammer that will smash it.

How do you react to what you’re beta readers tell you?

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Review: The Moonstone series by Marilee Brothers

Title: The Moonstone Series . Book 1: MOONSTONE. Book 2: MOONRISE. Book 3: Moon Spun, and Book 4: SHADOW MOON
Author: Marilee Brothers www.marileebrothers.com
Publisher: Bell Bridge Books www.bellbridgebooks.com
Category: Young adult urban fantasy

Netgally provided me with four books in this series as an exclusive review set and it appears that there must be at least one more to the series because at the end of book 4, although Allie had found the person she needed to help her, she still hadn’t saved the world from the threat of the Dark Fey and the Trimarks.

The Moonstone series is about Allie, a fifteen year old girl who lives in a small town in Washington State. In the first book, she gains psychic powers, is given a magical moonstone pendant, and battles evil Trimarks who try to steal the stone for their own nefarious purposes. In the following books we uncover the mysteries of her family tree, travel to a fairy realm, discover a prophecy and search for the other person it mentions.

As it says in the blurb – Fun, romantic, quirky and different, this YA fantasy series is a good read for young and mid-teen readers, but also for older teens and adults.

 I loved the light hearted moments in this series. It’s refreshing departure from the plethora of heavy YA books out there. The characters are all great. Alllie is someone I respect and who I like spending time with. Her boyfriends (a different one in each book) are good strong characters and her girlfriends are delightful. Allie’s mum and her friend Kizzy are both strong characters and their relationships and interactions with Allie are well thought out and realistic.

The story took me in directions I hadn’t imagined and in book 2, introduced some delightfully bizarre characters. Each book had a satisfying conclusion, but left enough unfinished to set the scene for the next instalment.

This is a terrific series and I was disappointed that the publisher hadn’t included the last book in the set.  I love being able to read a whole series without having to wait for a year between books, but it seems I will be waiting for the finale of this one. I recommend that you buy the whole lot and tuck yourself away for a good long read.

The only thing I didn’t like about this read was that I didn’t get to the end, and that can be solved as soon as the next book comes out. I give it 5 stars and highly recommend it.

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When you think it’s finished, it probably isn’t.

The most important thing I learned from following the traditional publishing route can be summed up in the words of an old saying –fools rush in. That’s why, unless you’re a very disciplined person who can leave your manuscript alone for long periods of time, or your work is so far out of the box that no one in mainstream publishing would ever consider it, I’d advise anyone starting out in the writing game to query agents and publishers (not all of them at once) before they opt for self publishing.

Why? The process helps you refine your work. There’s a lot of waiting around involved, time when your ms is with agents or publishers during which you can forget about it. After several rejections and the minimum of 3-4 months that it takes to get those rejections, you look it your ms again. That’s when you discover that you can still improve it. So you improve it and send it out to another bunch of agents or publishers.

Several months later, after another series of rejections, you look at it again and improve it some more. When you’ve done this a couple of times, you might actually be finished. The point is that on your first book, you probably think your book is as good as it’s going to get before it actually is. I’ve read often in blogs written by agents and publishers that the main fault they see with manuscripts is that they are submitted before they’re ready. You see the same problem in self-published books too ie they’re published before they’re ready.

That’s why I suggest that when you think your book is ready, you follow the steps below. Particularly if you’re publishing yourself, you need to put aside the burning desire to publish and pause.

  • Put your manuscript away for at least 1 month, preferably 3 months and much longer if it’s your first book (see the comments below). Being too keen to get it published is dangerous.
  • Read a lot of other books in your genre during that time.
  • Then read your work again as if you’re reading someone else’s work.
  • Write a review of it, being as critical as you can.
  • Ask yourself if it’s as good as the books you just read. If not, ask yourself how you can make it better. Particularly,
    • is there anything irrelevant in there?
    • is the writing and story clear?
    • what does the book say & is it what I want to say?
    • is it a bit flat? Check your notes on the difference between showing and telling. Also ask yourself if it needs more tension.
  • Then fix it, and if you don’t know how to fix it, research your craft. Google will find it all for you. It’s always good to research “show don’t tell” because not understanding the subtle points of that is often what makes writing lack that finished touch.

Even though I’ve already done this process once with Give Me a Break, I’ve just put it to bed until the end of the month. It’s hard not to want to send it straight to the editor and get it published as soon as I can, but I’ve learned how vital this part of the process is, so I’m following my own advice.

Reviewing your work as if it were someone else’s book works really well for me, do you ever do that?